A VILLANELLE TO THE GIRL IN 312

This is forward of me I know, but I pass you every day
and I have been fascinated by the very thought of you.
It seems there are so many thing I’d like to say.

I noticed that you appear to be all work and no play,
and that’s a shame for one with eyes so blue…
this is forward of me I know. But I pass you every day

and your smile always melts me; you make my blues go away.
I don’t even know what you name is, it’s true,
it seems there are so many things I’d like to say.

There is a sadness to you, and I wish there were something today
that I could do for you that would be nice, you’re long overdue.
This is forward of me I know, but I pass you every day

with nary a word spoken. My vocal cords aren’t broken but hey,
I’d like to extend a hand as friends and buy dinner for two,
it seems there are so many things I’d like to say.

It would be really nice to meet you and court you if I may.
We can talk and laugh and hopefully become friends so true.
This is forward of me I know, but I pass you every day,
it seems there are so many things I’d like to say.

(C) Walter J Wojtanik

dVerse Poets Pub – Meeting the Bar: Villanelle

Another Villanelle here: Time and Tide Waits Not

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19 thoughts on “A VILLANELLE TO THE GIRL IN 312

  1. Seeing someone everyday and desiring to meet them is repetitive and the villanelle form with all of its repetition seems to emphasize this well. Nice villanelle.

  2. I like the hand of friendship and invitation for dinner ~ Might be the start of a new journey ~

    Nice villanelle that I hardly noticed the form Walter ~

  3. So effective! Your use of repetition seems barely noticeable here. There is anticipation of the next step all the way through. It’s very cinematic and that’s not easy in a form poem but you achieve everything so satisfactorily. I loved it. It made me smile and gave me a little flutter too.

  4. Glenn Buttkus

    The universe let’s us cross paths with certain folks–which we may acknowledge or not–the old free will can lead to bad karma route

  5. Ah, this is so sweet. How it reminds me of that time many many years ago when I would sit by the window at 4:00 pm to watch the cute college guy pass by. 🙂

  6. An ode to the girl in 312! Love this take on the form….and how you’ve moved from the repeated line carrying the sense of that line into the next. Well done!

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