This is forward of me I know, but I pass you every day
and I have been fascinated by the very thought of you.
It seems there are so many thing I’d like to say.
I noticed that you appear to be all work and no play,
and that’s a shame for one with eyes so blue…
this is forward of me I know. But I pass you every day
and your smile always melts me; you make my blues go away.
I don’t even know what you name is, it’s true,
it seems there are so many things I’d like to say.
There is a sadness to you, and I wish there were something today
that I could do for you that would be nice, you’re long overdue.
This is forward of me I know, but I pass you every day
with nary a word spoken. My vocal cords aren’t broken but hey,
I’d like to extend a hand as friends and buy dinner for two,
it seems there are so many things I’d like to say.
It would be really nice to meet you and court you if I may.
We can talk and laugh and hopefully become friends so true.
This is forward of me I know, but I pass you every day,
it seems there are so many things I’d like to say.
(C) Walter J Wojtanik
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Seeing someone everyday and desiring to meet them is repetitive and the villanelle form with all of its repetition seems to emphasize this well. Nice villanelle.
I have actually heard stories of these things happening… one of my wife’s colleagues saw a guy on the way to work every day, and finally made her approach… they become an item if I remember right.
Well, you rascal, you’ve won me over! Good write, great villanelle, Walter!
I like the hand of friendship and invitation for dinner ~ Might be the start of a new journey ~
Nice villanelle that I hardly noticed the form Walter ~
So effective! Your use of repetition seems barely noticeable here. There is anticipation of the next step all the way through. It’s very cinematic and that’s not easy in a form poem but you achieve everything so satisfactorily. I loved it. It made me smile and gave me a little flutter too.
The universe let’s us cross paths with certain folks–which we may acknowledge or not–the old free will can lead to bad karma route
Things like this do happen I suppose!!!! A lovely theme for the villanelle!
Well crafted villanelle, well handled poetic voice! Good one, Walter!
This reminded me of my grandparents, who met on the “Number 3 Bus.” 🙂
It reads like a reverie and a beautiful one.
I like the conversational tone of this. The repetition is perfect, exactly how conversations work.
Great job, and thanks for writing!
Love the longer lines and the conversational tone. Very well written!
It would be really nice to meet you and court you if I may.
We can talk and laugh and hopefully become friends so true.
Such sincere openings may open a waiting heart. Beautiful Villanelle Walter
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Hank
There are so many things I’d like to say but bravo for this romantic villanelle will suffice
What a delight this was to read!
Ah, this is so sweet. How it reminds me of that time many many years ago when I would sit by the window at 4:00 pm to watch the cute college guy pass by. 🙂
An ode to the girl in 312! Love this take on the form….and how you’ve moved from the repeated line carrying the sense of that line into the next. Well done!
This is so openly romantic, Walt. A lovely villanelle.