Lyrics by Walter J. Wojtanik
Giggle if you feel the need
but as crazy as it seems,
anything is better
than sleeping through your dreams.
Every sense and sensation,
will cut you to the quick,
forget your frustration,
losing love can make you sick…
We should have been fine wine,
but we went down like moonshine,
and I promise that the next time
I’ll stick with a bottle of Perrier®.
It could have been the best time,
from the first to the last rhyme,
not just another fast time
with the one that got away.
I would’ve been, I could’ve been,
I should’ve been…here with you.
In spite of all the chattering,
things said were unflattering,
and even if it shatters me,
I’ll take my chance with you.
Better wake up and cut loose,
scoop up all the remnants that remain.
Everything is better
when you stay and play the game.
Lock down and load up,
and don’t cave in to life’s demands,
double down, don’t split up
you’ve been dealt the winning hand…
We could have been fine wine,
but we settled on moonshine,
and I promise that the next time
I’ll stick with a bottle of Perrier®.
It should have been the best time,
from the first to the last rhyme,
not just another fast time
with the one that got away.
I would’ve been, I could’ve been,
I should’ve been…here with you.
© Copyright Walter J. Wojtanik – 2013
Written for THE SUNDAY WHIRL – Wordle #113
THROUGH THE EYES OF A POET'S HEART 
This is a nice melody indeed. “We settled on moonshine” is a fantastic line. And that chorus is such a blast.
I was in a musical mood, Irene. The “moonshine” screamed country and that’s how this plays in my head. As with all my lyrics (and they’re backing up) this will eventually be joined with its melody. Thanks for your continued support! 🙂
Love the lyrics …. HAPPY FATHERS’ DAY…. Have a poem up that you might like …. 🙂
Thank you, Pearl! For the love and the HFD! And yo were so right, I liked… loved your poem. 🙂
Rumbustuous rhyming. Be sure your sins will find you out!
Well wordled.
Vivienne, I can always count on your for a lift. Thanks for those supportive words.
“We could have been fine wine,
but we settled on moonshine”
I like that!
Thanks J Cosmo. No need to go high off the hog when a good belt will do! I loved the way fine wine/moonshine rhymed AND represented the high/low of life.
You’re right to stick with Perrier… Fine wine or moonshine can both make you giddy…
Indeed they will Stan! Thanks.
I love the way this flowed! I could see swaying to and fro with some drinking buddies, mug of grog in hand, singing the words to this in a pirate-style fashion.
An interesting concept, and yes that could work well for this song too! Thanks for the kind words.
I completely agree with the comment that The Real Cie has said here!! I too pictured the same whilst reading :)…..straight out of a Jack Sparrow movie!!
Two for the scurvy pirate doo-wop group! I may need to rethink this and re-purpose. Thanks Nanka.
I love the playfulness in your song! But the emotions of regret shine through the playfulness. Well done! Whirl 113
WabiSabi, you get me! regret and playful are emotion at work. Glad yo caught that! Thanks.
Love the title, Walt. And I love the way this one rolls along!
Thanks Marianne. The fine wine/moonshine was explained above. The bottle of water was at my left hand when I wrote it. The Brand Name just gave it a flair!
Many of us must rue the drinks we had when we realize that something precious has been lost. Excellent rhythm to this piece.
I agree. The “one that got away” makes the “million fish in the sea” one mackerel lighter. Thanks for the comment.
Greatly entertaining, especially the first stanza which zings along and uses the given words seamlessly. Impressive.
Humbled by the “Impressive” tag. We are all entertainer in our way, David. Been a lyricist longer that a “poet”, even though I refer to my poems as non-musical lyrics. Thanks for checking in! 🙂
You have some nice sounds going on here, Walt. Well wordled.
Pamela
Thank you, Pamela. The words actually tempered the sound. I can hear the melody in my head without going anywhere near my piano. It sounds nice in there too! 😉
I totally dig your poem.
Thankfully my poem isn’t too deep. You’d be half way to China by now, Cheryl. 😉
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Perrier! Nice work, Walt. I love the rhythm and sounds at play in this piece.
Thanks Brenda. It was actually just a generic bottled water, but Perrier dressed it up a bit! 😉
I’m a bit late catching up on reading…
And I’m not at home at the moment…
I enjoyed your dity, was fun and witty.
Thanks for your visit.
I’m having some fun with some shorter Flash Fiction prompts too.
They are here:
http://julesinflashyfiction.wordpress.com/